SAT作文中間段修改實(shí)例講解

　　SAT作文中間段修改實(shí)例講解

　　三 When we came back to Suzhou, I began to work harder on my tennis training. Everyday I went to the tennis court after school. From 5p.m. to 8p.m., I 1exert all my strength at training. Everyday I was still training 2while my teammates went home with their parents.

　　分析：

　　1 時(shí)態(tài)的問題請(qǐng)大家一定要注重，確保前后一致。

　　2 在看這句的時(shí)候，突然覺得作者有一點(diǎn)感傷了，看到同學(xué)們都和爸媽一起回去了。

　　3 總體上說訓(xùn)練是一個(gè)把不好的記憶變成好記憶的重要過度，還得添加筆墨來加強(qiáng)場(chǎng)景感。

　　修改：

　　After returning to my hometown, days went on as usual. But that failed experience let me realize that as a tennis player, there was still a long way before me. In order to fill the gap between professional athletes and me, I became harder on myself. Everyday after school I could be spotted walking into the stadium and training painstakingly every night until the security guard hurried me up to leave there. Day in and day out, I kept practicing a series of skills---serving, forehand hitting and backhand returning, dampening one T-shirt after another. But no matter how tired I was, I always bore in mind an idea to beat that man who looked upon me one year ago. For almost a year, the total practice hours mounted to an amazing __ hours.

　　四 1 The second year, I joined my final match because my age was too old to join the match. I knew it was my final chance to defeat him. Luckily, we had a battle at the semi-final. 2 The time does not lose the person with high aspirations. Finally, I won the match with the score of 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5. At last, I said, 3 You are the loser now. Whats the feeling of it? Its my pound to interview you.

　　分析：

　　1 這個(gè)句子有點(diǎn)晦澀，應(yīng)該是指這個(gè)年齡段的比賽以后你就不能參加了。

　　2 不理解這句話

　　3 呵呵，實(shí)在是太可愛了，我們就順應(yīng)他的意思吧。

　　修改：

　　One year later, I entered, with great confidence, for the same competition, which would be my final performance since this game was prepared for children aged 8 to 12. After sweeping all my opponents, I entered the final and, not surprisingly, saw my greatest foe--- Hu, the defending champion. This time, he paled compared with a new me，who was not only skillful but also determined. Finally, after a two-hour fierce fight, I won the game by 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5.

　　五.總結(jié)例子 From my failure to my win, there is just one year. But it must be the experience I will never forget.

　　修改：

　　It takes me one year to turn the failed experience into a victory, during which I not only improved my skills in tennis but more importantly increased my courage to deal with troubles.

　　SAT作文中間段修改實(shí)例講解

　　三 When we came back to Suzhou, I began to work harder on my tennis training. Everyday I went to the tennis court after school. From 5p.m. to 8p.m., I 1exert all my strength at training. Everyday I was still training 2while my teammates went home with their parents.

　　分析：

　　1 時(shí)態(tài)的問題請(qǐng)大家一定要注重，確保前后一致。

　　2 在看這句的時(shí)候，突然覺得作者有一點(diǎn)感傷了，看到同學(xué)們都和爸媽一起回去了。

　　3 總體上說訓(xùn)練是一個(gè)把不好的記憶變成好記憶的重要過度，還得添加筆墨來加強(qiáng)場(chǎng)景感。

　　修改：

　　After returning to my hometown, days went on as usual. But that failed experience let me realize that as a tennis player, there was still a long way before me. In order to fill the gap between professional athletes and me, I became harder on myself. Everyday after school I could be spotted walking into the stadium and training painstakingly every night until the security guard hurried me up to leave there. Day in and day out, I kept practicing a series of skills---serving, forehand hitting and backhand returning, dampening one T-shirt after another. But no matter how tired I was, I always bore in mind an idea to beat that man who looked upon me one year ago. For almost a year, the total practice hours mounted to an amazing __ hours.

　　四 1 The second year, I joined my final match because my age was too old to join the match. I knew it was my final chance to defeat him. Luckily, we had a battle at the semi-final. 2 The time does not lose the person with high aspirations. Finally, I won the match with the score of 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5. At last, I said, 3 You are the loser now. Whats the feeling of it? Its my pound to interview you.

　　分析：

　　1 這個(gè)句子有點(diǎn)晦澀，應(yīng)該是指這個(gè)年齡段的比賽以后你就不能參加了。

　　2 不理解這句話

　　3 呵呵，實(shí)在是太可愛了，我們就順應(yīng)他的意思吧。

　　修改：

　　One year later, I entered, with great confidence, for the same competition, which would be my final performance since this game was prepared for children aged 8 to 12. After sweeping all my opponents, I entered the final and, not surprisingly, saw my greatest foe--- Hu, the defending champion. This time, he paled compared with a new me，who was not only skillful but also determined. Finally, after a two-hour fierce fight, I won the game by 7:5, 4:6 and 7:5.

　　五.總結(jié)例子 From my failure to my win, there is just one year. But it must be the experience I will never forget.

　　修改：

　　It takes me one year to turn the failed experience into a victory, during which I not only improved my skills in tennis but more importantly increased my courage to deal with troubles.