英語(yǔ)六級(jí)5分作文范文批改1

　　英語(yǔ)六級(jí)待批改作文：

　　In this chat, we learn about that people use cell phone is increasing speedy. Compared with 1999, it is more than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times.　　We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. It makes that many function like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, we always can use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price.　　In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use everyday will be changed into one terminal, I dont know what to call it, but it will have all current functions and we cant image out functions.

　　作文批改如下：

　　In thischat（改為chart）, we learn about thatpeopleusecell phoneisincreasingspeedy（改為rapidly）. Compared with 1999, itismore than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times.　　We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. Itmakes that many function（make do是個(gè)固定搭配）like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, wealways can（改為can always）use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price.　　In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use every day will be changed into one terminal,｛I dont know what to call it｝, but it will have all current functions and we cant image out functions.（不能理解你的意思）

　　同學(xué)你好，你的英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)比較薄弱，一個(gè)句子中只能有一個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞。最后一段如果不會(huì)寫你想要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容，那么就要換一個(gè)你會(huì)寫的觀點(diǎn)，像你最后一段中提到，I dont know,這是在寫作文，不要出現(xiàn)這么口語(yǔ)的句子，第二段開頭要寫一句，表明你下面要寫的原因。

　　英語(yǔ)六級(jí)待批改作文：

　　In this chat, we learn about that people use cell phone is increasing speedy. Compared with 1999, it is more than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times.　　We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. It makes that many function like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, we always can use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price.　　In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use everyday will be changed into one terminal, I dont know what to call it, but it will have all current functions and we cant image out functions.

　　作文批改如下：

　　In thischat（改為chart）, we learn about thatpeopleusecell phoneisincreasingspeedy（改為rapidly）. Compared with 1999, itismore than twice in 2002.And 2005 compare with 2002 is twice times.　　We pay attention to new electronic technology which has been used into cell phone. Itmakes that many function（make do是個(gè)固定搭配）like surfing Internet, taking photos, playing games, handling works, storing up files into cell phones, which makes our life convenient. When a kind of technology has been produced largely, its cost will be reduced. So, wealways can（改為can always）use the most advanced cell phones with suitable price.　　In my opinion, so much electronic equipment that we use every day will be changed into one terminal,｛I dont know what to call it｝, but it will have all current functions and we cant image out functions.（不能理解你的意思）

　　同學(xué)你好，你的英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)比較薄弱，一個(gè)句子中只能有一個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞。最后一段如果不會(huì)寫你想要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容，那么就要換一個(gè)你會(huì)寫的觀點(diǎn)，像你最后一段中提到，I dont know,這是在寫作文，不要出現(xiàn)這么口語(yǔ)的句子，第二段開頭要寫一句，表明你下面要寫的原因。