北京市08年高考英語開放式作文點(diǎn)評(píng)和習(xí)作的修改

　　第二節(jié) 開放作文 (15分)

　　請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。

　　In an English speech competition, you are asked to describe the following picture and explain to the judges how you understand it.

　　寫作文有兩個(gè)基本標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：一要切題，二要有文采。

　　這篇文章的題目要求有兩個(gè)：(上面紅字部分)

　　1. describe the following picture 描述圖畫內(nèi)容

　　2. explain to the judges how you understand it 對(duì)這幅畫的理解

　　所以，這篇文章基本可以分成兩段。第一段用來描述圖畫內(nèi)容。第二段用來寫這幅圖畫說明了什么問題。第三段總結(jié)問題。

　　1. 描述圖畫：

　　圓規(guī)(compass，今年很多同學(xué)都寫不出這個(gè)單詞，我查了一下這是個(gè)超綱詞，在《高中英語課程標(biāo)準(zhǔn)(詞匯表3500)》和《北京市高考英語考試說明》中都沒有出現(xiàn)，顯然是出題人的疏忽造成的，起碼應(yīng)該在試卷上提供compass這個(gè)單詞。)畫圓形很輕松，鉛筆跑得滿頭大汗。兩者形成了鮮明的對(duì)比。

　　2. 說明問題：

　　圓規(guī)和鉛筆有的特點(diǎn)不同

　　如何看待對(duì)方各自的特點(diǎn)

　　3. 總結(jié)問題：升華主題

　　You are somebody if you can innovative, but if you cant you are nobody.

　　第一段沒有描述圖畫是大忌。可以寫成：

　　As is shown in the picture, a pair of compasses are proud of drawing a circle with great ease, while a pencil are burdened with drawing a line. We can figure out something meaningful from the picture.

　　In our life, some people work very hard. Ang they often feel very tired. Because they often dont have enough experlence. But they often can be have some sudden harvest. So they usually will success, if they do something.

　　And another people have enough experlence. So they can do something very fast and well. But they usually cant have some harvest on work. S they cant honour all of life.

　　第二段需要指出問題的所在。首先要引用圓規(guī) 和pencil 說明他們各自的特點(diǎn)和各自看待對(duì)方的態(tài)度。然后再升華到人的角度來說明，做人應(yīng)該怎么怎么樣。可以寫成：

　　To begin with, difference can be seen clearly between the compasses and the pencil due to their different application. The compasses have every reason to feel superior in drawing a circle because they are designed to do so. But if the compasses are used to draw a line, the pencil may have the same feeling. As a result, a conclusion can be easily drawn: both of them have their own advantages.

　　So dont lose youself in your life.

　　第三段要總結(jié)問題，必須是從圓規(guī) 和pencil的問題中的抽象出來，總結(jié)出來一個(gè)做人做事的普遍規(guī)律。可以寫成：

　　From my point of view, we should be aware of our strengths and weaknesses and never show

　　due respect to everyone, for no one is perfect in this world.

　　官方給出的范文：

　　One possible version:

　　From the picture I can see a pair of proud compasses and a hard-working pencil. The compasses are big, drawing a circle with ease, while the pencil is small, drawing a line with great effort. I think the compasses are reasonable to be proud because no one else can do the job better. At the same time, however, he should realize the pencil has his own advantages. The pencil can do other shapes better than the compasses, even pictures. So in my opinion, while we are confident in ourselves, we should recognize strengths in others and show due respect for them.

　　第二節(jié) 開放作文 (15分)

　　請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提示，寫一篇短文。詞數(shù)不少于50。

　　In an English speech competition, you are asked to describe the following picture and explain to the judges how you understand it.

　　寫作文有兩個(gè)基本標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：一要切題，二要有文采。

　　這篇文章的題目要求有兩個(gè)：(上面紅字部分)

　　1. describe the following picture 描述圖畫內(nèi)容

　　2. explain to the judges how you understand it 對(duì)這幅畫的理解

　　所以，這篇文章基本可以分成兩段。第一段用來描述圖畫內(nèi)容。第二段用來寫這幅圖畫說明了什么問題。第三段總結(jié)問題。

　　1. 描述圖畫：

　　圓規(guī)(compass，今年很多同學(xué)都寫不出這個(gè)單詞，我查了一下這是個(gè)超綱詞，在《高中英語課程標(biāo)準(zhǔn)(詞匯表3500)》和《北京市高考英語考試說明》中都沒有出現(xiàn)，顯然是出題人的疏忽造成的，起碼應(yīng)該在試卷上提供compass這個(gè)單詞。)畫圓形很輕松，鉛筆跑得滿頭大汗。兩者形成了鮮明的對(duì)比。

　　2. 說明問題：

　　圓規(guī)和鉛筆有的特點(diǎn)不同

　　如何看待對(duì)方各自的特點(diǎn)

　　3. 總結(jié)問題：升華主題

　　You are somebody if you can innovative, but if you cant you are nobody.

　　第一段沒有描述圖畫是大忌。可以寫成：

　　As is shown in the picture, a pair of compasses are proud of drawing a circle with great ease, while a pencil are burdened with drawing a line. We can figure out something meaningful from the picture.

　　In our life, some people work very hard. Ang they often feel very tired. Because they often dont have enough experlence. But they often can be have some sudden harvest. So they usually will success, if they do something.

　　And another people have enough experlence. So they can do something very fast and well. But they usually cant have some harvest on work. S they cant honour all of life.

　　第二段需要指出問題的所在。首先要引用圓規(guī) 和pencil 說明他們各自的特點(diǎn)和各自看待對(duì)方的態(tài)度。然后再升華到人的角度來說明，做人應(yīng)該怎么怎么樣。可以寫成：

　　To begin with, difference can be seen clearly between the compasses and the pencil due to their different application. The compasses have every reason to feel superior in drawing a circle because they are designed to do so. But if the compasses are used to draw a line, the pencil may have the same feeling. As a result, a conclusion can be easily drawn: both of them have their own advantages.

　　So dont lose youself in your life.

　　第三段要總結(jié)問題，必須是從圓規(guī) 和pencil的問題中的抽象出來，總結(jié)出來一個(gè)做人做事的普遍規(guī)律。可以寫成：

　　From my point of view, we should be aware of our strengths and weaknesses and never show

　　due respect to everyone, for no one is perfect in this world.

　　官方給出的范文：

　　One possible version:

　　From the picture I can see a pair of proud compasses and a hard-working pencil. The compasses are big, drawing a circle with ease, while the pencil is small, drawing a line with great effort. I think the compasses are reasonable to be proud because no one else can do the job better. At the same time, however, he should realize the pencil has his own advantages. The pencil can do other shapes better than the compasses, even pictures. So in my opinion, while we are confident in ourselves, we should recognize strengths in others and show due respect for them.