11月8日雅思寫作的解析及語料庫

　　11月8日雅思寫作小作文：

　　柱形圖：

　　11月8日雅思寫作大作文：

　　Some think that most crime is the result of circumstances such as poverty and other social problems. Others believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both sides and give your opinion 有人認為犯罪是貧困或者是他的社會問題的結(jié)果，有人 認為犯罪者人性本惡，討論兩種觀點，給出你的觀點。

　　提問點評：新題出現(xiàn)，說完美押中的名師都是嘩眾取寵。

　　2024年11月8日雅思寫作小鵬哥押題：

　　犯罪類：

　　Sending criminals to prison is not the effective method to deal with them. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 將犯罪分子送進監(jiān)獄不是有效的方式解決犯罪，我們應(yīng)該給他們提供接受教育和工作培訓的機會，是否認同?

　　11月8日雅思寫作題目解析：

　　1. 周圍的環(huán)境引起犯罪：貧困;擇業(yè)難;校園暴力;槍支泛濫等

　　2. 本性就是壞人：人性本惡，有人天生就是注定犯罪的

　　薛鵬解析：兩種觀點討論;必須支持給出的一方觀點。

　　兩種觀點討論布局圖：

　　首段：背景介紹+爭議焦點+ 作家立場

　　二段：正方觀點的展開

　　三段：反方觀點展開

　　尾段：再次亮明觀點 +

　　作家觀點：支持犯罪是由于貧困和社會環(huán)境引起的。

　　思路拓展：

　　貧困和社會問題導致犯罪 = 外因引起犯罪：

　　1. 貧困的家庭孩子沒有受到良好教育，不能明辨是非，容易被引入迷途。

　　2. 科技發(fā)展，傳媒多元，色情暴力節(jié)目的傳播，毒害心靈，誤導人生觀，誘發(fā)犯罪沖動。

　　3. 槍支泛濫，為犯罪提供了便利，例如，在一些西方國家，槍支買賣合法。

　　人性本惡=內(nèi)因引起犯罪：

　　1. 有人認為，人性本惡，嫉妒，貪婪，自私，都是人的固有本質(zhì)，一旦在后天被激發(fā)，沒有正確的引導，會導致一些反社會行為的發(fā)展。

　　2. 例如，女性經(jīng)濟犯罪;黑社會大哥的慣性犯罪，報復社會，詛咒和憎恨他們認為不公平的社會。

　　薛鵬原創(chuàng)范文賞析：

　　首段：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 +　作家立場

　　Alarmingly, various stories concerning crimes have been pushing into spotlight. Conflicting ideas clash in finding out the root causes of misdeeds. My stand is that external reasons have a bigger influence on those misconducts. Nobody is born to be a criminal.

　　薛鵬點評：淡化模板;觀點鮮明。

　　薛鵬解析：

　　1. various stories 公眾資訊報道

　　2. concerning 關(guān)于

　　3. have been pushing into spotlight 成為關(guān)注的焦點

　　4. conflicting ideas clash in 矛盾的觀點在方面互相碰撞

　　解析：clash v碰撞

　　二段：正方三個觀點的展開：

　　My arguments could be easily explored. One contributing factor triggering manifold malefactions could be owed to the external circumstances in which the one is raised. To put in details, in some poverty-stricken or violent families, children are usually not properly taken care of and they stand few chances of receiving fine education, it is likely that such children may easily be led astray and even worse, they may conduct some anti-social offences. Still, pornographic or otherwise vulgar forms of media, have a really adverse impact on the young because the young can, in most cases, find it rather difficult to make positive choices about the types of influences in their lives, thus，it is possible for them to turn to a life of crime. Last, many perilous products that could be harnessed commit crimes are very easily and cheaply available to the youths. In fact, guns are sold in a number of stores in some countries. This fact alone makes it very easy for some people to embark on the criminal road.

　　三段：反方二個觀點的展開

　　Granted, some people might remain suspicious of my stand and believe that those perpetrators are born to be evil. Some people argue that habitual malefaction is the main root cause of high crime rate. As for those felons such as gangsters boss or professional blackguards, to break the law is to take revenge on the society which they think unfair. Besides, some people contend that such is human nature to be greedy, selfish and jealous, which accounts for many types of crimes. It is also found that some women commit economic crimes simply because they are more vain and avaricious than others.

　　薛鵬解析：

　　1. habitual malefaction 慣性犯罪

　　2. felons 重罪人

　　3. gangsters boss or professional blackguards 黑幫大哥和職業(yè)流氓

　　4. take revenge on the society which they think unfair 報復認為不公平的社會

　　5. vain and avaricious 虛榮的貪婪的

　　尾段：再次亮明觀點　+　總結(jié)理由

　　In a nutshell, I re-affirm my stand that different crimes could be combination of various elements, however, in comparison with evil nature, external factors actually play a profound influence in leading some immature or inexperienced people to go astray.

　　薛鵬全文點評：本文依然保持小鵬哥原創(chuàng)范文的高質(zhì)量，符合雅思寫作評分各項標準，建議背誦精彩詞匯句法。11月份月末兩場考試請關(guān)注新東方網(wǎng)雅思頻道，小鵬哥預測近期發(fā)布。

　　類似提問角度：

　　The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion? 有人認為：父母工作，無暇照顧孩子，導致少年發(fā)展，是否同意?

　　薛鵬原創(chuàng)語料庫：

　　1. juvenile crime = adolescent crime青少年犯罪

　　2. teenage crime = juvenile delinquency青少年犯罪

　　3. young offenders = teenage criminals = young law-breakers 少年犯

　　4. embark on the criminal road 走上犯罪道路

　　5. turn to a life of crime 開始罪惡的人生

　　6. conduct some anti-social offenses 做出反社會行為

　　7. commit crime = violate the law 犯罪

　　8. domestic violence = family violence家庭暴力

　　9. pornographic or bloody contents色情的血腥的內(nèi)容

　　解析：porno + graph+ic = pornographic 色情的

　　10. blindly model after sth 盲目效仿

　　11. to be led astray被引入歧途

　　12. Some criminalities can be owed to the disadvantaged family background such as poverty, violence or parental divorce. 不良的家庭成長環(huán)境，例如貧困，暴力和父母離異。

　　13. According to the statistics, the rate of youth crime is in proportion to that of divorce rate. 少年犯罪率和離婚率成正比。

　　解析：is in proportion to 成正比

　　14. An environment of poverty, violence and fear. Such a growing environment often results in low self-esteem and other growth-related concerns. 較低的自尊心和一些成長相關(guān)的問題。

　　解析：self-esteem 自尊

　　15. It is also found that some women commit economic crimes simply because they are more vain and avaricious than others. 人們發(fā)現(xiàn)，有些女性進行經(jīng)濟犯罪，僅僅是因為她們比其他人更加的虛榮和貪婪而已。

　　11月8日雅思寫作小作文：

　　柱形圖：

　　11月8日雅思寫作大作文：

　　Some think that most crime is the result of circumstances such as poverty and other social problems. Others believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both sides and give your opinion 有人認為犯罪是貧困或者是他的社會問題的結(jié)果，有人 認為犯罪者人性本惡，討論兩種觀點，給出你的觀點。

　　提問點評：新題出現(xiàn)，說完美押中的名師都是嘩眾取寵。

　　2024年11月8日雅思寫作小鵬哥押題：

　　犯罪類：

　　Sending criminals to prison is not the effective method to deal with them. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 將犯罪分子送進監(jiān)獄不是有效的方式解決犯罪，我們應(yīng)該給他們提供接受教育和工作培訓的機會，是否認同?

　　11月8日雅思寫作題目解析：

　　1. 周圍的環(huán)境引起犯罪：貧困;擇業(yè)難;校園暴力;槍支泛濫等

　　2. 本性就是壞人：人性本惡，有人天生就是注定犯罪的

　　薛鵬解析：兩種觀點討論;必須支持給出的一方觀點。

　　兩種觀點討論布局圖：

　　首段：背景介紹+爭議焦點+ 作家立場

　　二段：正方觀點的展開

　　三段：反方觀點展開

　　尾段：再次亮明觀點 +

　　作家觀點：支持犯罪是由于貧困和社會環(huán)境引起的。

　　思路拓展：

　　貧困和社會問題導致犯罪 = 外因引起犯罪：

　　1. 貧困的家庭孩子沒有受到良好教育，不能明辨是非，容易被引入迷途。

　　2. 科技發(fā)展，傳媒多元，色情暴力節(jié)目的傳播，毒害心靈，誤導人生觀，誘發(fā)犯罪沖動。

　　3. 槍支泛濫，為犯罪提供了便利，例如，在一些西方國家，槍支買賣合法。

　　人性本惡=內(nèi)因引起犯罪：

　　1. 有人認為，人性本惡，嫉妒，貪婪，自私，都是人的固有本質(zhì)，一旦在后天被激發(fā)，沒有正確的引導，會導致一些反社會行為的發(fā)展。

　　2. 例如，女性經(jīng)濟犯罪;黑社會大哥的慣性犯罪，報復社會，詛咒和憎恨他們認為不公平的社會。

　　薛鵬原創(chuàng)范文賞析：

　　首段：背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 +　作家立場

　　Alarmingly, various stories concerning crimes have been pushing into spotlight. Conflicting ideas clash in finding out the root causes of misdeeds. My stand is that external reasons have a bigger influence on those misconducts. Nobody is born to be a criminal.

　　薛鵬點評：淡化模板;觀點鮮明。

　　薛鵬解析：

　　1. various stories 公眾資訊報道

　　2. concerning 關(guān)于

　　3. have been pushing into spotlight 成為關(guān)注的焦點

　　4. conflicting ideas clash in 矛盾的觀點在方面互相碰撞

　　解析：clash v碰撞

　　二段：正方三個觀點的展開：

　　My arguments could be easily explored. One contributing factor triggering manifold malefactions could be owed to the external circumstances in which the one is raised. To put in details, in some poverty-stricken or violent families, children are usually not properly taken care of and they stand few chances of receiving fine education, it is likely that such children may easily be led astray and even worse, they may conduct some anti-social offences. Still, pornographic or otherwise vulgar forms of media, have a really adverse impact on the young because the young can, in most cases, find it rather difficult to make positive choices about the types of influences in their lives, thus，it is possible for them to turn to a life of crime. Last, many perilous products that could be harnessed commit crimes are very easily and cheaply available to the youths. In fact, guns are sold in a number of stores in some countries. This fact alone makes it very easy for some people to embark on the criminal road.

　　三段：反方二個觀點的展開

　　Granted, some people might remain suspicious of my stand and believe that those perpetrators are born to be evil. Some people argue that habitual malefaction is the main root cause of high crime rate. As for those felons such as gangsters boss or professional blackguards, to break the law is to take revenge on the society which they think unfair. Besides, some people contend that such is human nature to be greedy, selfish and jealous, which accounts for many types of crimes. It is also found that some women commit economic crimes simply because they are more vain and avaricious than others.

　　薛鵬解析：

　　1. habitual malefaction 慣性犯罪

　　2. felons 重罪人

　　3. gangsters boss or professional blackguards 黑幫大哥和職業(yè)流氓

　　4. take revenge on the society which they think unfair 報復認為不公平的社會

　　5. vain and avaricious 虛榮的貪婪的

　　尾段：再次亮明觀點　+　總結(jié)理由

　　In a nutshell, I re-affirm my stand that different crimes could be combination of various elements, however, in comparison with evil nature, external factors actually play a profound influence in leading some immature or inexperienced people to go astray.

　　薛鵬全文點評：本文依然保持小鵬哥原創(chuàng)范文的高質(zhì)量，符合雅思寫作評分各項標準，建議背誦精彩詞匯句法。11月份月末兩場考試請關(guān)注新東方網(wǎng)雅思頻道，小鵬哥預測近期發(fā)布。

　　類似提問角度：

　　The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion? 有人認為：父母工作，無暇照顧孩子，導致少年發(fā)展，是否同意?

　　薛鵬原創(chuàng)語料庫：

　　1. juvenile crime = adolescent crime青少年犯罪

　　2. teenage crime = juvenile delinquency青少年犯罪

　　3. young offenders = teenage criminals = young law-breakers 少年犯

　　4. embark on the criminal road 走上犯罪道路

　　5. turn to a life of crime 開始罪惡的人生

　　6. conduct some anti-social offenses 做出反社會行為

　　7. commit crime = violate the law 犯罪

　　8. domestic violence = family violence家庭暴力

　　9. pornographic or bloody contents色情的血腥的內(nèi)容

　　解析：porno + graph+ic = pornographic 色情的

　　10. blindly model after sth 盲目效仿

　　11. to be led astray被引入歧途

　　12. Some criminalities can be owed to the disadvantaged family background such as poverty, violence or parental divorce. 不良的家庭成長環(huán)境，例如貧困，暴力和父母離異。

　　13. According to the statistics, the rate of youth crime is in proportion to that of divorce rate. 少年犯罪率和離婚率成正比。

　　解析：is in proportion to 成正比

　　14. An environment of poverty, violence and fear. Such a growing environment often results in low self-esteem and other growth-related concerns. 較低的自尊心和一些成長相關(guān)的問題。

　　解析：self-esteem 自尊

　　15. It is also found that some women commit economic crimes simply because they are more vain and avaricious than others. 人們發(fā)現(xiàn)，有些女性進行經(jīng)濟犯罪，僅僅是因為她們比其他人更加的虛榮和貪婪而已。