考研英語復習資料考研英語作文范文的批改7

　　I have read your advertisment in the nespaper for a staff member,and should be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for this position. I am sure that I am qualified for it.First,my major is coincide with the jobs requirement.Second,my cheerful personality is well suited to having a job like this.My hobbies include sports and music,and I can play erhu. I would be appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could show you the detail in person about my background and training.I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience. Sincerely, Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear sir or Madam, I have read your advertisment(拼寫錯誤advertisement) in the nespaper(拼寫錯誤newspaper) for a staff member, and(加主語I)should(應該用would) be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for this position. I am sure that I am qualified for it. First, my major is coincide with the jobs requirement. Second, my cheerful personality is well suited to having a job like this. My hobbies include sports and music, and I can play erhu. I would be appreciate(應該用形容詞appreciated) if you could grant me an interview so that I could show you the detail in person about my background and training. I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience. Sincerely(一般用Yours sincerely), Li Ming 點評：6分

　　第二段的內容不夠充實。最好第一段寫出招聘的具體職位，第二段更加有針對的推銷你自己。

　　I have read your advertisment in the nespaper for a staff member,and should be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for this position. I am sure that I am qualified for it.First,my major is coincide with the jobs requirement.Second,my cheerful personality is well suited to having a job like this.My hobbies include sports and music,and I can play erhu. I would be appreciate if you could grant me an interview so that I could show you the detail in person about my background and training.I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience. Sincerely, Li Ming

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear sir or Madam, I have read your advertisment(拼寫錯誤advertisement) in the nespaper(拼寫錯誤newspaper) for a staff member, and(加主語I)should(應該用would) be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for this position. I am sure that I am qualified for it. First, my major is coincide with the jobs requirement. Second, my cheerful personality is well suited to having a job like this. My hobbies include sports and music, and I can play erhu. I would be appreciate(應該用形容詞appreciated) if you could grant me an interview so that I could show you the detail in person about my background and training. I am looking forward to your favorable reply at your earliest convenience. Sincerely(一般用Yours sincerely), Li Ming 點評：6分

　　第二段的內容不夠充實。最好第一段寫出招聘的具體職位，第二段更加有針對的推銷你自己。