考研英語作文批改范例

　　Dear Sir/（改為or）Madam,　　I write this letter to you in order（刪除，重復(fù)） to find a candidate for （改為of）the Project Hope, because I have decided to offer financial aid to a child in a remote area.　　As there are many children who need help, maybe I should let you know that the candidate I want to help would be a girl in primary school.　　I have planned （一般現(xiàn)在時就可以plan）to keep offering her 1000 yuan a year until she graduated（原型graduate） from junior high school. Besides, I am quite willing to send her some used clothes and books, and I would really like to write letters to her.　　Thank you so much for doing me this favour. I am looking forward to your reply.Sincerely,　　Li Ming　　點評：8-9分　　文章的語言流暢，內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)也較為清晰。只是出現(xiàn)了個別的表達(dá)錯誤，希望引以為鑒。有一點需要說明的，你稍有一些受中文思維的影響，這就要求你在今后的學(xué)習(xí)中注意多學(xué)習(xí)地道的英文表達(dá)。