考研英語小作文批改邀請信0-4分例文2

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Mark，

　　There will be a volunteer activitiy in the Childrens Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance. All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for September 15th.

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Mark，

　　There will be a volunteer activitiy(拼寫錯誤，改為activity) in the Childrens Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement(此處應該寫一個具體的活動) .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance(刪除 ). All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday.(給某人過生日，不要用help)I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for (刪除，RSVP before的意思就是在之前通知我)September 15th.

　　加Sincerely yours，

　　你的名字

　　3分

　　同學你好，要注意書信的寫作格式，你對模版的理解不透徹而且英語基礎比較薄弱，建議你多看看滿分作文。

　　考研英語待批改作文：

　　0-4分

　　第二篇

　　Dear Mark，

　　There will be a volunteer activitiy in the Childrens Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance. All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for September 15th.

　　考研英語作文批改點評如下：

　　Dear Mark，

　　There will be a volunteer activitiy(拼寫錯誤，改為activity) in the Childrens Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement(此處應該寫一個具體的活動) .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance(刪除 ). All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday.(給某人過生日，不要用help)I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for (刪除，RSVP before的意思就是在之前通知我)September 15th.

　　加Sincerely yours，

　　你的名字

　　3分

　　同學你好，要注意書信的寫作格式，你對模版的理解不透徹而且英語基礎比較薄弱，建議你多看看滿分作文。